Karin Revisited: Audio and Video!

Last Friday's Poetry Picture Show event in Sydney was a lot of fun. Ten poets reading out poems about the moving image, followed by short films based on the contents of those poems. Highlights for me were Kate Lilley's take on Mildred Pierce and John Tranter's Paris Blues but of course everyone was wonderful. The crowd was great too, packing out the old Darlington School hall, a building I'd never even been to, though it's in the grounds of Sydney University, where I scraped through an undergraduate degree. You can read my poem Karin Revisited online or listen to an audio version (mp3 format). You can also have a look at the short film Johanna and her team made in response to my poem (probably requires broadband). One thing I noticed about the text version of my poem, which is written in four line stanzas, is that I inadvertantly included a stanza with only three lines. Does anyone have any suggestions for the fourth line? Here is what it looks like right now, in context:

Dancing makes you free. You�re in an invisible machine, standing upright, & each movement of your body bends space & time. For Karin, that moment before lift-off comes like a swoon, or a screen kiss at the end of a dance. She freezes in mid-air like Superman before a blue screen, or a magician�s assistant, supported by strings, listening for the end of each scene. A minimum of crowd noise, just the tube�s silver surf. The way it was that afternoon at home when she sat & listened all the way through it. That silence ...

Any ideas?